Opening sentence for my story
Welcome to my blog everyone
write an interesting first sentence to hook our reader
my first sentence was The boy was playing a game on his xbox.
this is my improred sentence Bang, bang! The shots fired in the boy’s video game.
k my updated sentence is
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Hello Alex.
ReplyDeleteIt's great to see you have posted some work on your blog but it doesn't make sense.Can you re-read and see where you need to improve your sentences?.
Thank you for showing us what you have been doing in class.
Hello Alex.
ReplyDeleteThis is just a comment to let you know that I have had a look at your blog tonight.
Hello Alex, I enjoyed the part when you told everyone you’re improved writing sentence. I understood the first bit but then when it got to k my updated sentence is sentence hook my, then got a bit confused. Did you think about telling people what this was or meant? Next time you could tell everyone who was writing an interesting sentence. Why did you choose to have this interesting sentence? Have an amazing afternoon -Angel
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